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Original story called: The world of Onyxstar
Looking for some advice and polite criticism
in another dimension from our own we visit the milky way and zoom in on where our 10 major planets lay but in this demention there are 11 major planets
The sun: same as ours the name of the gassy star the size of a planet is the sun no notable difference from our own
The moon: colonatised but otherwise the same as ours.
Mars
Venus
Jupiter
Onyxstar: Athynst forest

First of all Alex is from another dimension so our rules and social aspects are different from ours, first Onxystar is as big as earth same mass same climates, but unlike earth the whole planet is organized by multiple people who work together, Alex's time zone is socially medieval, but has no views of gender, so a king, queen or both of either could rule the mass, and since the only religion is that of taking care of the planet and it's people there are no rules from separating the mass to gender or species, meaning a tiger anthropoid (animal humanoid) Could be married or even own a sheep animoid (animal who can turn into an athropod but is either unwilling or possibly can't) in a fashion of a farmer of our earth would a sheep of our earth the difference between them and us, they are all aliens to us (consider watching Ben ten when he turns into the tiger study that tiger and that's what these guys are but of all animal and human types) you'd think the world would be chaotic what's to stop the tiger from eating his/her sheep, again, they are neither human nor animal, but both like us can control themselves now, yes, there are non-existing animals and some half breed humans, for example harpy, mermaid, lamia, there are an unlimited number of possibilities of animal-human, animal-animal, even some human-human. It is a world where everyone can coexist peacefully, killing for sport or fun is highly illegal, there are places that do have ways to hunt while still following that so that one party can hunt, but must bring back the carcass either for themselves or someone else who might not be able to hunt but eats meat.
They do have the technology, bit prefer nature overall
Anything else I can add to this?
Currently working on laws

Lore for Onyxstar
In a place further away than a dream but closer than a wink
Was it the best place..perhaps a place called Onyxstar where gods, goddesses and Demi gods roamed free from the people that shunned them for being well..different..a young woman by the name of Yemala she was Japanese her mother was the goddess of life..plant life that is and her father was a famous movie animator and director when upset or angry she could make plants tower over Mount Everest without blinking or breaking a sweat and a young named Draxton who prefers to be called Him was the son of Loki god of mischief he could make people laugh just by walking in the door.
Heh ok then I'll take that say a piece of that was loose and broke off and changed over time to survive
It's kinda a second moon for earth
I was thinking the sun would be in a different direction so when the rock hit the pieces wouldn't fly into the sun
Both animals and humans
No like earth they either where put there or evolved
OK I was thinking about modern day earth but how about around the 1700's

Question! So when it's possible for a tiger anthro to either marry and enslave a sheep anthro, this means the strongest rules? technically yes but they have an agreement sort of mix zootopia and two kinds and lion king (best known reference to behaviors and behavior diffrences, forests are more who's ever the Alpha gets to deal the rules sometimes there strict sometimes there not
Alex's land for example is more of a ecosystem where everyone benefits without doing to much harm (ie eating dead body's it fish instead of live pray) but has a holiday hunt of sorts where carnivores can kill a surtent amount of pray animals to keep it balanced (mostly aimed for older adults with no young kids but if that happens the pred has to make sure that kids taken care of but unharmed) And natural carni- and omnivores are still that and are still allowed to eat meat? yes mostly fish or pasted away due to them believing it'll inhance there uh bladder for nature

I wonder how laws and equality rights work in such a society. How do they differentiate between a sheep who doesn't want to be anthro, a sheep who has the mind of an anthro but can't change their appearance and a normal sheep (livestock). Is a sheep anthro who just prefers sheep-form for whatever reasons on one level with those who join the anthros or livestock? since most of them have that ability growing up unless rased as cattle so not given the chance, but still able to communicate if they have a brighter mind (something within there DNA allows them all to learn any language as long as they have the mindset to do so even normal cattle has the ability they just don't use or learn it). Appearance over mind? (could go even further into detail. Are there mutations and disabilities, maybe offsprings that are genetically anthro but can't shapeshift for a reason? generally this only happens when rased as livestock or inbreeding but when it does there a little less bright in surtent things (changing, talking, ect) Do they lose their human/anthro rights and are degraded to livestock? no even livestock has the right to want freedom there generally just rased as if death is natural so don't commonly fight it but they can marry and have kids willingly but if unable to do so willingly they are generally fixed and marked as food so not to put them though the tedious responsibilities to clarify themselves as ready (generally they've failed a simpler test of this already)

How do human rights (in lack of a better word) work in such a society, similar to our own till I find my own set of rights what laws protect the weak, it depends on where they are in the forest Alex is the kindest to her people and hasn't had issues with people breaking her rules but there are punishments based on what you broke is it an ideal, crime-free world and how are those handled who break the laws? generally yes no one yet broke Alex's laws mostly because of the way she was seem defending her territory of strangers no one seems to want her wrath but if anyone breaks the laws she would stop them and depending of the issue deal out justly sometimes harshly if nessary What kind of crimes are possible in such a society? Alex's could rusk other territorys trying to avade and take over but generally her people are happy full and needing no real funds (trade, barter, sell, and buy like system anything can be used as long as it doesn't harm the world

Who is in charge, carnivores, omnivores, herbivores or a diverse group? a diversity

How do half-humans like mermaids work? Are they actually partly humanoid lifeforms, or is DNA of different lifeforms compatible? both actually they have the ability to be humanoid, animal, alien, or a mix of any and all And also with Gods? Who has magical powers, only those once considered Gods? Yes, immortal with powers, or mortals with powers that differ from the norm mostly from being a desendent rarely a mortal with powers are born without ties to a god, goddesses, and/or a demigod. Do powers that are passed down to half-bloods come with a price? some do some don't element control is usually the easiest and rarely affects the mind and/or body nagitively in anyway, while on the other hand speed has different affects depending on how much and how it's used

Being the horrible person I am, I wonder how sexuality works in such a world. What's considered as erotic and desirable, how would a brothel look like? normal, poly and non-poly relationships are welcome and tend to accept both female, male, and binary brothels as long as it's consental for all others usually if hidden or force can get you marked with a symbol and thrown out in any land (Universal sign of a cheat/rapist) Would Tiger-Dude with Sheep-Lady be okay when Sheep-Lady is in her sheep form? yes so long as she's not predominantly branded as food or he could be marked with the symbol I mentioned before (still working on what I want that symbol to be)
liers aren't thrown out unless a threat but are braided and although very rare and unusual (because traders are supposed to accept anything worth having, seeing, or doing as well as a colored polished stone much like our jems (very common but tedious to make the stone worth anything as no one can trade it before it's polish) theft also has a brain

Is it really possible to reach a consensus on society and religion with so many different species involved? For Alex's no everyone likes her beliefs and how she rules (believes nature is meant to help and protect not to be destroyed and killed for needless means
To let them all have the same values? For Alex before she set her rules she took everything in (mostly everyone has the same beliefs very few people go against it and when they do most of the time everyone can come to a peaceful conclusion) Can a mermaid and Tiger-Dude and Sheep-Lady and Sheep-Kid who refuses to change into its anthro-form really have the same rights, duties and values? Yes although the kid a little less so with Alex since 16 is adult in her world till then they don't have as much rights but can still have the same duties as an adult there values depend on the kid themselves regardless of species and upbringing

How much will Norse mythology influence your mythology? Or will it just be that one name drop? name drop A planet where the forgotten Gods live sounds cool, do they come from all belief systems? Greek, Norse, maybe Russian folklore, nature spirits and so on? No they'll be there own system with probably similar duties and abilities as other believe systems. Do they have a society and rules of their own, do different Gods of Death, the Underground, or leading figures co-exist peacefully on a physical world or rather planes? they all exist pretty peaceful on the same planet but dead are on a different vail but can be seen and heard much like our ghosts but without the limits and confusion (so no poltergeist)

Any help
I'm trying to think of a better how Onyxstar was made but not sure how any tips?
And any tips for planet names, laws, and ecosystem and such
Uploaded 29/10/2016 03:43

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Original story called: The world of Onyxstar
Looking for some advice and polite criticism
in another dimension from our own we visit the milky way and zoom in on where our 10 major planets lay but in this demention there are 11 major planets
The sun: same as ours the name of the gassy star the size of a planet is the sun no notable difference from our own
The moon: colonatised but otherwise the same as ours.
Mars
Venus
Jupiter
Onyxstar: Athynst forest

First of all Alex is from another dimension so our rules and social aspects are different from ours, first Onxystar is as big as earth same mass same climates, but unlike earth the whole planet is organized by multiple people who work together, Alex's time zone is socially medieval, but has no views of gender, so a king, queen or both of either could rule the mass, and since the only religion is that of taking care of the planet and it's people there are no rules from separating the mass to gender or species, meaning a tiger anthropoid (animal humanoid) Could be married or even own a sheep animoid (animal who can turn into an athropod but is either unwilling or possibly can't) in a fashion of a farmer of our earth would a sheep of our earth the difference between them and us, they are all aliens to us (consider watching Ben ten when he turns into the tiger study that tiger and that's what these guys are but of all animal and human types) you'd think the world would be chaotic what's to stop the tiger from eating his/her sheep, again, they are neither human nor animal, but both like us can control themselves now, yes, there are non-existing animals and some half breed humans, for example harpy, mermaid, lamia, there are an unlimited number of possibilities of animal-human, animal-animal, even some human-human. It is a world where everyone can coexist peacefully, killing for sport or fun is highly illegal, there are places that do have ways to hunt while still following that so that one party can hunt, but must bring back the carcass either for themselves or someone else who might not be able to hunt but eats meat.
They do have the technology, bit prefer nature overall
Anything else I can add to this?
Currently working on laws

Lore for Onyxstar
In a place further away than a dream but closer than a wink
Was it the best place..perhaps a place called Onyxstar where gods, goddesses and Demi gods roamed free from the people that shunned them for being well..different..a young woman by the name of Yemala she was Japanese her mother was the goddess of life..plant life that is and her father was a famous movie animator and director when upset or angry she could make plants tower over Mount Everest without blinking or breaking a sweat and a young named Draxton who prefers to be called Him was the son of Loki god of mischief he could make people laugh just by walking in the door.
Heh ok then I'll take that say a piece of that was loose and broke off and changed over time to survive
It's kinda a second moon for earth
I was thinking the sun would be in a different direction so when the rock hit the pieces wouldn't fly into the sun
Both animals and humans
No like earth they either where put there or evolved
OK I was thinking about modern day earth but how about around the 1700's

Question! So when it's possible for a tiger anthro to either marry and enslave a sheep anthro, this means the strongest rules? technically yes but they have an agreement sort of mix zootopia and two kinds and lion king (best known reference to behaviors and behavior diffrences, forests are more who's ever the Alpha gets to deal the rules sometimes there strict sometimes there not
Alex's land for example is more of a ecosystem where everyone benefits without doing to much harm (ie eating dead body's it fish instead of live pray) but has a holiday hunt of sorts where carnivores can kill a surtent amount of pray animals to keep it balanced (mostly aimed for older adults with no young kids but if that happens the pred has to make sure that kids taken care of but unharmed) And natural carni- and omnivores are still that and are still allowed to eat meat? yes mostly fish or pasted away due to them believing it'll inhance there uh bladder for nature

I wonder how laws and equality rights work in such a society. How do they differentiate between a sheep who doesn't want to be anthro, a sheep who has the mind of an anthro but can't change their appearance and a normal sheep (livestock). Is a sheep anthro who just prefers sheep-form for whatever reasons on one level with those who join the anthros or livestock? since most of them have that ability growing up unless rased as cattle so not given the chance, but still able to communicate if they have a brighter mind (something within there DNA allows them all to learn any language as long as they have the mindset to do so even normal cattle has the ability they just don't use or learn it). Appearance over mind? (could go even further into detail. Are there mutations and disabilities, maybe offsprings that are genetically anthro but can't shapeshift for a reason? generally this only happens when rased as livestock or inbreeding but when it does there a little less bright in surtent things (changing, talking, ect) Do they lose their human/anthro rights and are degraded to livestock? no even livestock has the right to want freedom there generally just rased as if death is natural so don't commonly fight it but they can marry and have kids willingly but if unable to do so willingly they are generally fixed and marked as food so not to put them though the tedious responsibilities to clarify themselves as ready (generally they've failed a simpler test of this already)

How do human rights (in lack of a better word) work in such a society, similar to our own till I find my own set of rights what laws protect the weak, it depends on where they are in the forest Alex is the kindest to her people and hasn't had issues with people breaking her rules but there are punishments based on what you broke is it an ideal, crime-free world and how are those handled who break the laws? generally yes no one yet broke Alex's laws mostly because of the way she was seem defending her territory of strangers no one seems to want her wrath but if anyone breaks the laws she would stop them and depending of the issue deal out justly sometimes harshly if nessary What kind of crimes are possible in such a society? Alex's could rusk other territorys trying to avade and take over but generally her people are happy full and needing no real funds (trade, barter, sell, and buy like system anything can be used as long as it doesn't harm the world

Who is in charge, carnivores, omnivores, herbivores or a diverse group? a diversity

How do half-humans like mermaids work? Are they actually partly humanoid lifeforms, or is DNA of different lifeforms compatible? both actually they have the ability to be humanoid, animal, alien, or a mix of any and all And also with Gods? Who has magical powers, only those once considered Gods? Yes, immortal with powers, or mortals with powers that differ from the norm mostly from being a desendent rarely a mortal with powers are born without ties to a god, goddesses, and/or a demigod. Do powers that are passed down to half-bloods come with a price? some do some don't element control is usually the easiest and rarely affects the mind and/or body nagitively in anyway, while on the other hand speed has different affects depending on how much and how it's used

Being the horrible person I am, I wonder how sexuality works in such a world. What's considered as erotic and desirable, how would a brothel look like? normal, poly and non-poly relationships are welcome and tend to accept both female, male, and binary brothels as long as it's consental for all others usually if hidden or force can get you marked with a symbol and thrown out in any land (Universal sign of a cheat/rapist) Would Tiger-Dude with Sheep-Lady be okay when Sheep-Lady is in her sheep form? yes so long as she's not predominantly branded as food or he could be marked with the symbol I mentioned before (still working on what I want that symbol to be)
liers aren't thrown out unless a threat but are braided and although very rare and unusual (because traders are supposed to accept anything worth having, seeing, or doing as well as a colored polished stone much like our jems (very common but tedious to make the stone worth anything as no one can trade it before it's polish) theft also has a brain

Is it really possible to reach a consensus on society and religion with so many different species involved? For Alex's no everyone likes her beliefs and how she rules (believes nature is meant to help and protect not to be destroyed and killed for needless means
To let them all have the same values? For Alex before she set her rules she took everything in (mostly everyone has the same beliefs very few people go against it and when they do most of the time everyone can come to a peaceful conclusion) Can a mermaid and Tiger-Dude and Sheep-Lady and Sheep-Kid who refuses to change into its anthro-form really have the same rights, duties and values? Yes although the kid a little less so with Alex since 16 is adult in her world till then they don't have as much rights but can still have the same duties as an adult there values depend on the kid themselves regardless of species and upbringing

How much will Norse mythology influence your mythology? Or will it just be that one name drop? name drop A planet where the forgotten Gods live sounds cool, do they come from all belief systems? Greek, Norse, maybe Russian folklore, nature spirits and so on? No they'll be there own system with probably similar duties and abilities as other believe systems. Do they have a society and rules of their own, do different Gods of Death, the Underground, or leading figures co-exist peacefully on a physical world or rather planes? they all exist pretty peaceful on the same planet but dead are on a different vail but can be seen and heard much like our ghosts but without the limits and confusion (so no poltergeist)

Any help
I'm tryingSfw
Original story called: The world of Onyxstar
Looking for some advice and polite criticism
in another dimension from our own we visit the milky way and zoom in on where our 10 major planets lay but in this demention there are 11 major planets
The sun: same as ours the name of the gassy star the size of a planet is the sun no notable difference from our own
The moon: colonatised but otherwise the same as ours.
Mars
Venus
Jupiter
Onyxstar: Athynst forest

First of all Alex is from another dimension so our rules and social aspects are different from ours, first Onxystar is as big as earth same mass same climates, but unlike earth the whole planet is organized by multiple people who work together, Alex's time zone is socially medieval, but has no views of gender, so a king, queen or both of either could rule the mass, and since the only religion is that of taking care of the planet and it's people there are no rules from separating the mass to gender or species, meaning a tiger anthropoid (animal humanoid) Could be married or even own a sheep animoid (animal who can turn into an athropod but is either unwilling or possibly can't) in a fashion of a farmer of our earth would a sheep of our earth the difference between them and us, they are all aliens to us (consider watching Ben ten when he turns into the tiger study that tiger and that's what these guys are but of all animal and human types) you'd think the world would be chaotic what's to stop the tiger from eating his/her sheep, again, they are neither human nor animal, but both like us can control themselves now, yes, there are non-existing animals and some half breed humans, for example harpy, mermaid, lamia, there are an unlimited number of possibilities of animal-human, animal-animal, even some human-human. It is a world where everyone can coexist peacefully, killing for sport or fun is highly illegal, there are places that do have ways to hunt while still following that so that one party can hunt, but must bring back the carcass either for themselves or someone else who might not be able to hunt but eats meat.

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